Although, “a national survey showed that four in 10 Americans have considered adoption,” according to the National Adoption Day, with adoption laws becoming more and more strict, it is beginning to get very difficult for prospective parents to adopt new children into their family. Adoption is a very time consuming and complex process to complete. With all of the strict requirements that adoptive parents need to surpass now a day, finding the right adoption agency is very important and a major decision to make when deciding to adopt a child. In order to find the most suitable adoption agency for each adoptive couple or parent, comparing several different agencies to each other, and choosing the best form of adoption is crucial to ensure a happy and successful adoption.
I chose to start my essay with a fact in order to make the introduction more interesting so that the reader would want to continue and read on.
A question that I would like to ask about my introduction is whether or not the opening sentence works well for my essay topic and if some of the sentences in the introduction are too repetitive?
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I think that the opening sentence was a great way to start off your essay.
I think that the opening sentence was a great way to start off your essay.
This is a good way to start off your essay. It shows the reader that you are interested in the topic and want every one else to know about.
I would take out the word although, and maybe shorten the sentence because it seems to run on a little. Other than that it is a good intro.
Sheree: I agree with Zack, too, and try to shorten that first sentence as a way to tighten it and make it more powerful. Your third sentence might be a bit repetitive. I look forward to reading this.
You have a nice detailed opening paragraph, but the only thing I would suggest, is try to shorten some of the sentences.
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